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Healthy Competition
She called as soon as the office opened, determined to be first on the first, but the phone rang busy, the line crammed with eager end-seekers, all not wanting to wait their turn.
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Written in response to a Trifextra Writing Challenge: 33 words taking off on this line from Maggie Stiefvater’s The Scorpio Races, “It is the first day of November and so, today, someone will die.”
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I love the cadence to this and that it’s all one perfect sentence.
I think I will print out this comment and post it on my wall. Thank you!
“First on first”-nice play:with words:-)And I loved how you brought the basic flaw in human nature in that how we tend to view others with disdain while we continue to do the same with no compunction 🙂
I hadn’t thought of it that way, but now that you point it out… I see it.
:-)So many times the readers “see” differently than the writer intends which I find very fascinating.
I like this. Great work!
Your work is always wonderful – my first click on Trifecta. 🙂
It seems that’s the case in many things…me first…no matter what it is for!
Oh yes, everyone wants to be the first, all at the same time. Inspiring post!
Nice twist. It makes me wonder at the reason why so many seek death.